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A logline is a (very) brief plot synopsis of your story. Novelists also use them to “sell” agents and publishers on their books. A logline is also used for a television listing or a media blurb. A good logline may encourage an agent or a publisher to keep reading your query letter.

Unfortunately, writing good loglines is difficult. What to include? Here’s a few logline examples used in Dramatica’s Writers’ Dreamkit software:

Star Wars: It is a time of rebellion. The evil Empire has most of the galaxy
under its control except for a handful of rebels. However, with the
Empire’s new weapon, even that last holdout may be destroyed…
Blade Runner: “Rick Deckard prowls the steel – and – microchip jungle of 21st-century Los Angeles. He’s a “blade runner” stalking genetically made criminal replicants. His assignment: kill them. Their crime: wanting to be human.”
(Video blurb, Warner Home Video.)

Barefoot in the Park: A conservative young lawyer and his irrepressible bride struggle with marital discord after the ecstasy of the honeymoon gives way to the reality of setting up housekeeping in a five-flight walk-up.

The major factor that these loglines have in common is that they describe the main “problem-to-be-solved” plot point. You’ll notice, if you know these stories, that this same plot point is set-up and presented at the start. The short bits of backstory that oftentimes come at the beginnings of movies and novels aren’t important to mention in the logline. For example, Luke Skywalker’s time wallowing away on a desert planet before his big adventure is seen in the movie but is left out of the logline. The logline gets to the point. Quickly.

You need to write a logline for your story. Why? Along with the brief “back book jacket” synopsis, the logline helps keep you focused as you write (or edit) your story. As you advance the plot or are cleaning up loose ends, refer back to the logline and the synopsis to make sure you are delivering on your promise. The typical Netflix browser reads the logline for Bladerunner and expects a good sci-fi film. Imagine the disappointment if the entire film ended up being a character study of weeping robots in couples therapy. Sure, it’s got the artificial intelligence bits, but it’s wandered so far off course it is unrecognizable.

This wandering off course is common for us fiction writers. The focus of a logline and a synopsis is crucial whether you are a free-form writer (dump out a first draft with no set plot in mind first, plot second) or a planner (plot the entire story first, then write), or like me, a bit of both.

So, what’s your logline, baby? Write a one for your story. It needn’t be perfect, and it can change along the journey, but just make sure it matches up in the end. Delivering on your promises goes a long way with building trust with readers (and agents!).

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Current distractions. I should be writing!

Letterboxing (still learning about it)

Sewing (refashioning T-shirts)

Knitting (always)

*sigh*

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“Their” instead of “his or her”

“A driver should not use their cruise control in rainy weather.”

“Anyone in their right mind wouldn’t eat moldy cheese.”

Are these incorrect? Shouldn’t “their” be replaced with “his or her?”

We all have heard this in everyday speech. Perhaps we have been corrected in our writing.

My husband’s field, Philosophy, answers the issue by simply using “she” or “her” in any writing. The reasons are efficiency and to combat sexism (as most readers expect a “he” when either “he” or “she” can be used. Using “she” helps people make mental images of females in examples).

Surprisingly, Merriam-Webster.com has “their” listed as such:

2 : his or her : HIS, HER — used with a singular antecedent that is indefinite or that does not specify gender <anyone in their senses — W.H.Auden> <we shall be pleased to send a free specimen copy … to a friend or relative on receipt of their address — London Calling>

I’ve seen them apply this usage in a recent newsletter.

Years ago I would have been miffed at this “degradation” of the English language. Now I applaud it. Efficiency is beauty, and taking gender bias out of writing is helpful in making the world a better place. “Their” fills both these needs. Let’s do it. But if a person wants to be a stickler for “proper” English, it is their prerogative.

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Plurals by Apostrophe?

Errors abound when pluralizing terms. This video (about 15 seconds in) puts an apostrophe on the end of “mom” i.e, “mom’s,” intended for the plural of “mom”, which is “moms”.

YouTube – The Motherhood Manifesto

That kind of error makes me disregard the true message of the video. Like most people, I hold public documents to a higher standard than informal writing.

Recently I bought a skin care product that had the word “ethnicity’s” in the text, when the plural “ethnicities” was intended.

Here’s the Merriam-Webster’s definition of apostrophe:


Main Entry:
2apostrophe Pronunciation Guide

Pronunciation:


Function:
noun

Inflected Form(s):
-s


Etymology: Middle French & Late Latin; Middle French apostrophe, from Late Latin apostrophus, from Greek apostrophos, from apostrophos turned away, from apostrephein to turn away, from apo- + strephein to turn — more at STROPHE
: the mark ‘ or ‘ used to indicate omission of one or more letters or figures (as in can’t for cannot, judg’d for judged, wish’d for wished, mascara’d for mascaraed, ’76 for 1776), to mark the possessive case of English nouns and of certain English pronouns (as in Bill’s, Moses’, women’s, boys’, anyone’s) or the plural of letters (as in two a’s) or of figures (as in three 7’s) and sometimes of words that are not normally nouns (as in no if’s or but’s),
to set off an inflectional or derivational suffix from a word that is
pronounced by uttering the name of each of its letters (as in their IQ’s, he OK’s it, GOP’er), or to constitute a terminal quotation mark

The confusion lies in the use of an “‘s” to make a noun plural. The nouns that are made plural with the addition of an apostrophe plus an “s” are rare and usually colloquial. Numbers are commonly written with the “‘s” (we’ve all seen the year terms written this way e.g. The 1980’s), and as the entry above states, initialized words like RSVP’s and AM’s or PM’s.

The trick to this is to notice usage and commonality. We’ve all heard the term “moms” in conversation if not so often in print. It’s safe to construct the plural in the traditional manner. With the initialized words, contructing the plural with an apostrophe makes it easier to read because we are accustomed to seeing the singular in print, e.g. OK and OK’s – OKs looks strange and may trip up a person reading aloud or silently, even within context.

When in doubt, use the regular construction of adding an “s” or “es” to words when writing a plural noun. If the word is an initial or a number, or if it just plain looks weird with a plain “s,” then use an apostrophe. The grammarians can figure out the rest.

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ESL English Language Quizzes

English Language Quizzes – UsingEnglish.com

Look under “Intermediate English”, then Adjectives and Adverbs. Take the Adjective or Present Participle? quiz (10 questions – no more than 2 minutes). I missed one answer. Tell me how you do.

There are a ton of other interesting grammar quizzes if present participles don’t float your boat. (you don’t have to register to take the quizzes).

Good luck!

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